Love's Puzzle Pieces - wildfire

Title: Love’s Puzzle Pieces
Url: www.winglin.net/fanfic/wildfire
Reviewer: Miss Lovie @ Ambiguous Abyss

Title: 7/10

It does give me a sweet feeling; love does work that way, with the help of affinity and fate. So it does seem like puzzle pieces in some way. However, it still lack of something which will really ignite sparks of interest in reader and let them go ‘o’. You have got to work on that.

Forewords: 6/10
This is fine, but definitely not intriguing. It seems as though it’s going to be quite cliché, maybe ending up in the same school, or meeting each other somehow. But I won’t deny you of your efforts in trying to interest your readers. Good try, though.

Poster & Background: 10/10
I do like the poster. Nice artwork. Font goes well with the background too, so here you go, 10marks.

Characters: 3/5
This pairing is a bit overly used. Of course I can understand it’s only now, in the present situation. When you started this fanfiction, it was still quite a new pairing then.

Creativity & Originality: 12/20
So, they did end up attending the same school. Certain scenes are cliché and overly used, which makes your story a little boring. Maybe you would like to try coming up with some new scenes? Actually jigsaw puzzle is a nice idea to start with. You can branch out new ideas from there.

However I do like the idea of ending each chapter with someone playing jigsaw puzzle. It’s effective in widening space for imagination. =)

Story plotting & Organisation:12/20
Each chapter should comprise of a small climax at the end, in order to interest your readers to read on. Try to come up with one for every chapter, and this would really add sparks to your story. Not only that, your plot would become one that is very interesting too.

For the flow of the story, it is quite inconsistent, especially towards to the end of the story. Because you’re in hurry to end your story (may not be so, but it seems so), your story is accelerating at too high a speed. This makes your story seems a bit confusing. This is a small pointer to take note of.

Characterization wise, there’s still room for improvement. Now, your story is featuring characters of age of only fifteen, yet the plot makes it seems as though they are already in their twenties. Readers might question whether it’s realistic because the feelings felt were too mature. You need to work on your characters based on their age, otherwise they will just be dead in your writing and not alive. If not, you may want to change the age and settings to suit your characters. Either way works fine.

Language: 10/15
There’s quite a few grammar and spelling mistakes here and there. Just remember to look out for them before posting up every chapter.

And, quite a wide range of vocabulary is being used. Keep it up.

Enjoyment: 6/10
The feelings conveyed to the readers were quite superficial, not provoking at all. You may want to add more descriptions to evoke thoughts and feelings in your readers.

But, undeniable, it’s still quite an enjoyable read because some lines used were quite witty.

Bonus: 5/5
I know it’s never easy to write a fanfiction especially when it’s your first one, so you deserve these five marks to spur you on. Good luck! =)

Total: 71/100